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Post Chapter 45
Almost at the end of this Book...

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I am very curious about those protocols, and look forward to someone explaining them. Something to do with Kept interacting with Kept and Keepers with Keepers, I am guessing.

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Well that was interesting.

Poor Jamian, and poor Ty not knowing what to do. I guess these Protocols mean a Kept's welfare is the job of his Keeper and others aren't supposed to interfere. Or there are specific ways of doing it, since someone has mention that it's possible to challenge a Keeper for their Kept).

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Marje from his Russian class, Marje with the stunning green eyes and hair the color of molasses, moans loudly and flopped onto the table.
- has a tense shift - it should be moaned nor moans shouldn't it?
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his eyes the blues Jamian had ever seen
should be bluest right?

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Becky,

Yep, I'll correct those tonight. Thanks!

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Nice chapter. I think things are going to get a lot more complicated between Jamian and Ty.

Poor Ty? I just can't muster any sympathy for the guy. He's his own worst enemy and keeps making the same mistakes over and over again. Oh, not to mention screwing other people up in the bargain. I think he's kind of a tool.


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I can't help but be happy for Jamian, though, as empathy can only help when dealing with someone who seems to have such wild moodswings. Once he learns not to feel it too, anyway. I still hold out hope that they'll be good for each other - Ty for Jamian's bodyimage issues, Jamian for Ty's insecurities.

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I, too, hold out hope for something good to come of the Jamian & Ty relationship. While Ty does keep repeating the same mistakes over and over again, it *does* have its last two mistakes living right there with it, and they're more than willing to hit it over the head ;-)

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Tya messes it up again. :(
Well, from where they are, it can only get better, can it not? (Or is that blind-sighted optimist guesty speaking again? :roll: )

Interesting superpower you got your Daeva there. As much as I've read that Jame is not exactly having fun, I still envy him. Good thing no one can grant me my wishes for superpowers, I think I'd have destroyed the world several times by now.

And something magical was in the air? Did Aelfgar magically amplify his sex appeal?


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I think Jamian's new powers should definitely help in his interactions with Ty. It's not just the mood swings. Ty has a rather flighty relationship with the truth. However, it is much harder to lie with one's emotions.

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